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Liquidity

11/17/2015

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I'm on the wave,
i'm in the water.
Let me pass trough
and cross the boarder!
To this liquid state of mind,
wich makes me free and bright.
doesntmatter:)
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Emanuel link
11/19/2015 05:15:17 am

I really like this.

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Emanuel link
11/19/2015 05:15:44 am

Scratch that I love it!

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Samuel Tillman
11/23/2015 05:38:52 pm

Wonderful!

At first pass this struck me as an authentic mantra. Of course a mantra can me anything but this immediately *felt* like one. The concept of being both on the wave, and in the water, is a calming and transforming one. But you then go further and express wish to transcend the border.

What this said to me was that, while you're on the wave and in the water (one could say in "both" aspects of the body of water) you're recognizing that there is still a border to be passed. To me this would be the duality of "being" the wave and "being" the water - to transcend and to be it all as one, at once. The liquid state where it isn't one or another, but flows freely.

Very nice work. I'm super happy to see a new face around here. I hope you contribute more :D

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