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Red Roses 

7/5/2016

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A clear bottle 
holds red roses
by the bottle's neck. 
Two cut stems, 
one longer 
than the other 
one dangling 
by the bottle's neck.
Two cut stems,
in bottled air 
above the dregs
of rosé wine 
at the bottle's bottom.

AM Spence
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Emanuel link
7/5/2016 10:19:45 pm

Very visual. And a cool image. The question that arises in my mind is who is it that leaves his roses in wine? A mad villain with a poetic mind? Fun to ponder, at least for me.

Thanks for sharing your poetry

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Samuel Tillman
7/16/2016 07:43:44 pm

Reading this, about halfway though, a sense of visceral manipulations took hold of what I thought this poem was about. A study of a pair of roses, perhaps sitting on a sill or table inspired this. But at this moment, the same images suddenly developed an almost sensual or mortal motif. The scene begins simply enough, but then one rose is taller than the other. They both hang on the neck, and the reason to cut one shorter is so that they display better. One has sacrificed and is left hanging by the neck, but so that the pair can display more composed beauty. By the time I got to the dregs of wine I had this whole romantic or at least emotional ensemble going on and the dregs of wine spoke to bitter memories of sweeter times, or the longing to return to more of whatever the wine may have represented. The dregs are pretty much concentrated and the hard, substantive pieces in the wine. This stuff, the bitter hard truths, are all that is left in the bottle, yet here are these two roses still a symbol of the essence of what the wine was.

Speculative stuff like this is like art reviews - it may be nothing near what you meant, but this is the depth of what I got out of it. I love it :D

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